It's a two-part blog hop, so today, I will be posting the first sentences (Hookers!) of a few chapters from After Elizabeth. Tune in on the 18th for some ending (Hanger!) sentences.
In no particular order:
Don't!
I'm sweating my balls off as I sit shot gun in a U-haul.
When
The walls are pink? Really, Mom? Really?
Claire’s car comes to a slamming stop, and I’m jolted forward so hard the locked seatbelt is like a punch to the chest.
When Sunday was said and done, Baxter was dead, and my ankle was officially sprained.
And one more, that's a little more heartbreaking:
It was winter the first time
I'm excited to see the rest of the hookers for you guys!
These are all so GOOD! The pink walls one made me lol. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! A lot of people seem to like that one.
DeleteThese are great. I'd read more. :)
ReplyDeleteI like the pink walls one too, so fun!
ReplyDeleteThe best part is, it's a boy speaking :)
DeleteOh, that's so sad! Great lines. :) (I like your title, too, by the way.)
ReplyDeleteWell done!
Thank you! A friend helped me with the title. I love it.
DeleteWow! These are awesome! I really love the last two!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! The last one breaks my heart :(
DeleteI love all of these. They're such a good indication of the voice.
ReplyDeleteMan so good. Love the title. The first line is funny and has great voice. And that last added line, so sad!
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to read your hangers!!
The post is already scheduled :) Thanks!
DeleteGreat voice... full of snakiness. Really good lines.
ReplyDeleteLove the lines - they definitely make me want to read this story!
ReplyDeleteIf you're interested in beta-ing....lemme know :) Or you know, maybe I'll land an agent :):)
DeleteHey - I'm happy to (amateurish)beta but I have to warn you I tend to go slow. So if you have other betas who will get it done faster, that might be the go :)
DeleteIf you land an agent and get it published, I shall certainly buy a copy :D
Loved them all! Clean and simple yet they speak volumes.
ReplyDeleteThey all sound a little heart-breaking, in their own way. I have a feeling this is a sad story. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteThis one definitely got me to tear up a bit as I wrote.
DeleteThese are some seriously good hookers! Wow! Intense and emotional! Nicely done :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Hope! Yours were lovely, too!
DeleteFav was pink walls
ReplyDeleteMost people seemed to like that one most :)
DeleteNot knowing the context...I laughed at the last one! :)
ReplyDeleteWow - these are really strong! Excellent characterization and voice in these! The 2nd and 4th ones were my absolute favorites!
ReplyDeleteYou like the boy narration :) Thanks!
DeleteReally nice hookers. Each were intriguing leaving me wanting to know more. Can't wait to read your hangers. Enjoyed reading.
ReplyDeleteWell thank you very much! I love this hop, because we get to say hookers like it's a good thing :)
DeleteAll of your first lines are great, well done! Good luck with the contest and thanks for stopping by my blog :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by mine, too! Thank you for the compliment!
Delete#6 was definitely my favourite ;) I love how the ankle seems more important than the dead body ;) Great voice :)
ReplyDeleteThank you very much! I think that was one of my favorite scenes to start. :)
Delete"It was winter the first time Elizabeth tried to kill herself." Definitely my favorite.
ReplyDeleteThat point of the story was when my heart fully started to break. Rough novel, rough novel...
DeleteThese are great! That last one was my favorite :)
ReplyDeleteThank you very much!
DeleteWow, those are great hookers! I love the last one! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks! It seems to be a tie between the last sentence and the pink room :)
DeleteOh my goodness! Who doesn't love a sentence that starts off with, "I'm sweating my balls off."?
ReplyDeleteI'm hooked!!!!
Hahaha!! Excellent. (Is it bad if I'm a girl and I say that on almost a daily basis? :) )
DeleteThat last one is AMAZING, and so haunting. I love hooks like that. And you were a sea turtle in your past life? (Replying from your comment on my post--thank you!) My sister LOVES turtles :) You would be great friends :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome! You should inquire about her past lives! :) Thanks for stopping by my blog :)
DeleteSome really great hookers. Looking forward to seeing your hangers.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Hangers will be up shortly!
DeleteThe first one is awesome! Grabs the attention, for sure. But I love them all. Very expressive, and I can tell this would be a great read.
ReplyDeleteEee! Thank you for the compliment! Out of all of my novels, so far, this one is my favorite.
DeleteWow. Great hookers. Definitely wouldn't put your story down after those first lines.
ReplyDeleteI like the Don't. Short and Sweet. Althougth I'm really wondering what happens after that.
The Don't! is the opening sentence (If you wanna know what happens, first chapter is up in the Novels tab :) ) Thanks for stopping by!
DeleteFab voice!!! Awesome! This sounds like exactly the kind of book I want to read.
ReplyDeleteThat is wonderful to hear! Thanks, Cassie!
DeleteOh yes to "Don't." and "It was winter the first time Elizabeth tried to kill herself. "
ReplyDelete"Don't" is the first word of the novel :) I felt so clever at the time I wrote it, lol.
DeleteOk, I'm going with "The walls are pink. Really, Mom? Really? Of course, all of them are good:)
ReplyDeleteThank you. It seemed to be a toss up between the pink walls and the Elizabeth trying to kill herself.
DeleteOkay, somehow I missed this one. I love how strong your voice is!! 1,2,4, and 6 are my faves.
ReplyDeleteI've always hated pink. When I was younger I went to Alaska every summer to stay with my father... Well one summer I came home to pink carpet in my bedroom!!! Pink carpet! I was 11 and thought I would die! In fact I'm still pissed and might have to call my mom right now and remind her of that :D haha
I wanted to be the pink power ranger when I was a kiddo, to the point I got my teachers to allow me to write Kimberly (ranger's name) Schmidt on my papers :). I grew out of that phase (not sure when), and now black is my favorite color, lol.
DeleteYour story though, is hilarious :)
Oh man, that last one is heart breaking. I love the voice that's coming out in this. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteThe last two are deep and intense - very sad!
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