Monday, July 16, 2012

Hookers

Over at Falling for Fiction they're hosting the Hookers and Hangers blog hop!



It's a two-part blog hop, so today, I will be posting the first sentences (Hookers!) of a few chapters from After Elizabeth. Tune in on the 18th for some ending (Hanger!) sentences.

In no particular order:

Don't!


I'm sweating my balls off as I sit shot gun in a U-haul.

When Elizabeth came back to school on Wednesday, she couldn’t make it through an entire class without crying. 



The walls are pink? Really, Mom? Really?


Claire’s car comes to a slamming stop, and I’m jolted forward so hard the locked seatbelt is like a punch to the chest.

When Sunday was said and done, Baxter was dead, and my ankle was officially sprained. 




And one more, that's a little more heartbreaking:

It was winter the first time Elizabeth tried to kill herself. 


 I'm excited to see the rest of the hookers for you guys!

62 comments:

  1. These are all so GOOD! The pink walls one made me lol. :)

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    1. Thank you! A lot of people seem to like that one.

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  2. I like the pink walls one too, so fun!

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    1. The best part is, it's a boy speaking :)

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  3. Oh, that's so sad! Great lines. :) (I like your title, too, by the way.)
    Well done!

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    1. Thank you! A friend helped me with the title. I love it.

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  4. Wow! These are awesome! I really love the last two!

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    1. Thank you so much! The last one breaks my heart :(

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  5. I love all of these. They're such a good indication of the voice.

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  6. Man so good. Love the title. The first line is funny and has great voice. And that last added line, so sad!

    Can't wait to read your hangers!!

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    1. The post is already scheduled :) Thanks!

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  7. Great voice... full of snakiness. Really good lines.

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  8. Love the lines - they definitely make me want to read this story!

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    1. If you're interested in beta-ing....lemme know :) Or you know, maybe I'll land an agent :):)

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    2. Hey - I'm happy to (amateurish)beta but I have to warn you I tend to go slow. So if you have other betas who will get it done faster, that might be the go :)

      If you land an agent and get it published, I shall certainly buy a copy :D

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  9. Loved them all! Clean and simple yet they speak volumes.

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  10. They all sound a little heart-breaking, in their own way. I have a feeling this is a sad story. Very well done.

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    1. This one definitely got me to tear up a bit as I wrote.

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  11. These are some seriously good hookers! Wow! Intense and emotional! Nicely done :)

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    1. Thank you, Hope! Yours were lovely, too!

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    1. Most people seemed to like that one most :)

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  13. Not knowing the context...I laughed at the last one! :)

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  14. Wow - these are really strong! Excellent characterization and voice in these! The 2nd and 4th ones were my absolute favorites!

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  15. Really nice hookers. Each were intriguing leaving me wanting to know more. Can't wait to read your hangers. Enjoyed reading.

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    1. Well thank you very much! I love this hop, because we get to say hookers like it's a good thing :)

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  16. All of your first lines are great, well done! Good luck with the contest and thanks for stopping by my blog :)

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    1. Thanks for stopping by mine, too! Thank you for the compliment!

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  17. #6 was definitely my favourite ;) I love how the ankle seems more important than the dead body ;) Great voice :)

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    1. Thank you very much! I think that was one of my favorite scenes to start. :)

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  18. "It was winter the first time Elizabeth tried to kill herself." Definitely my favorite.

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    1. That point of the story was when my heart fully started to break. Rough novel, rough novel...

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  19. These are great! That last one was my favorite :)

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  20. Wow, those are great hookers! I love the last one! :)

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    1. Thanks! It seems to be a tie between the last sentence and the pink room :)

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  21. Oh my goodness! Who doesn't love a sentence that starts off with, "I'm sweating my balls off."?
    I'm hooked!!!!

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    1. Hahaha!! Excellent. (Is it bad if I'm a girl and I say that on almost a daily basis? :) )

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  22. That last one is AMAZING, and so haunting. I love hooks like that. And you were a sea turtle in your past life? (Replying from your comment on my post--thank you!) My sister LOVES turtles :) You would be great friends :)

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    1. Awesome! You should inquire about her past lives! :) Thanks for stopping by my blog :)

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  23. Some really great hookers. Looking forward to seeing your hangers.

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    1. Thank you! Hangers will be up shortly!

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  24. The first one is awesome! Grabs the attention, for sure. But I love them all. Very expressive, and I can tell this would be a great read.

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    1. Eee! Thank you for the compliment! Out of all of my novels, so far, this one is my favorite.

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  25. Wow. Great hookers. Definitely wouldn't put your story down after those first lines.

    I like the Don't. Short and Sweet. Althougth I'm really wondering what happens after that.

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    1. The Don't! is the opening sentence (If you wanna know what happens, first chapter is up in the Novels tab :) ) Thanks for stopping by!

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  26. Fab voice!!! Awesome! This sounds like exactly the kind of book I want to read.

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    1. That is wonderful to hear! Thanks, Cassie!

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  27. Oh yes to "Don't." and "It was winter the first time Elizabeth tried to kill herself. "

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    1. "Don't" is the first word of the novel :) I felt so clever at the time I wrote it, lol.

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  28. Ok, I'm going with "The walls are pink. Really, Mom? Really? Of course, all of them are good:)

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    1. Thank you. It seemed to be a toss up between the pink walls and the Elizabeth trying to kill herself.

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  29. Okay, somehow I missed this one. I love how strong your voice is!! 1,2,4, and 6 are my faves.

    I've always hated pink. When I was younger I went to Alaska every summer to stay with my father... Well one summer I came home to pink carpet in my bedroom!!! Pink carpet! I was 11 and thought I would die! In fact I'm still pissed and might have to call my mom right now and remind her of that :D haha

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    1. I wanted to be the pink power ranger when I was a kiddo, to the point I got my teachers to allow me to write Kimberly (ranger's name) Schmidt on my papers :). I grew out of that phase (not sure when), and now black is my favorite color, lol.

      Your story though, is hilarious :)

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  30. Oh man, that last one is heart breaking. I love the voice that's coming out in this. Very nice!

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  31. The last two are deep and intense - very sad!

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